一篇優秀的留學生dissertation在語言表達上應該是什么樣？只是擁有復雜的句式、高級的詞匯、大量的短語詞組？在小編，留學生dissertation大多屬于學術dissertation，并不需要太過華麗的表達，簡明生動才是重要的。國外有句話是這么說的：Never use ten words where five will do.那留學生dissertation如何才能做到簡明生動呢？下面小編教大家兩個技巧。
1、簡化句子結構，增強活力和表現力
① 以it，here, or there be開頭且指引的是句中的名詞，同時句子里常常跟上to be/ to do的句子結構，比如it is, it was, here is, there is, therewill be……這些結構往往不再強調句中實際的驅動者成分，把true driver的意義稀釋了，而且這種結構通常需要其他關系詞來支撐和聯接，如who, that and when，進一步dilute你的文章。具體來說，比如：
There are some bloggers who seem to have...
這里的thereare 把句子的重心放在了模糊的概念there上，而不是句中的true focus，即some bloggers, 而且作者還需要加上who這個語法上需要但實際沒什么含義的關系詞。這樣就用了三個不必要的filler words（填充詞），另一方面還把句中的實義動詞弱化了。順便提個醒，不要碰到“有”就想到there be句型。
再舉一些例子：
? Wordy：It's fun to editing.
? Concise：Editing is fun.
? Wordy：There are many people who write.
? Concise：Many people write.
?Wordy：Here are some things to consider：
?Concise：Some things to consider are:
② 適當地把后置定語從句改成前置形容詞，比如：
?Wordy：Do not try to anticipate those events that will completely revolutionize society.
?Concise：Do not try to anticipate revolutionary events.
③ 把伴隨動作狀語改成副詞，比如：
?Wordy：Sympathizing with her concerns, he nodded in response to her complaint.
?Concise：He nodded sympathetically in response to her complaint.
④“which is” 、 “who were”等有時可以刪除但保留原義且無傷語法，比如：
?Wordy：We drove down Lombard Street, which is considered the crookedest street in the world.
?Concise：We drove down Lombard Street,considered the crookedest street in the world.
⑤ 介詞短語改寫，比如：
?Wordy： The opinion of the working group.
?Concise： The working group's opinion.
2、可以用動詞來描述的時候就盡量避開弱化語氣的名詞化表達
比如當你看到“verb+ a/an noun” 的組合結構,直接用實義動詞來代替該短語，簡化句子的同時增強句子活力。比如：
?Wordy：The report gave an analysis of the accident.
?Concise：The report analyzed the accident.
?Wordy：Give your post a proofread.#p#分頁標題#e#
?Concise：Proofread your post.
?Wordy：Alcohol is the cause of hangovers.
?Concise：Alcohol causes hangovers.
?Wordy： The stability and quality of our financial performance will be developed through the profitable execution of our existing business, as well as the acquisition or development of new businesses.
?Concise： We will improve our financial performance not only by executing our existing business more profitably but by acquiring or developing new businesses.